For some reason I've found that the pieces I exhibit the least control over are the ones that come across better well there you go. i am not surprised lol, it tends to be the same way for me.
no, i liked the staccato beat! and i don't think that pulling the sentences together removes this, i think commas can serve the same way as dots in this case. maybe it's just me, but i tend to read run-on sentences faster than shorter sentences. like when i write down my own dreams, like a nightmare with lots of things going on at once, where all the impressions swirl around in my head, i tend to write it as a rly long ranty sentences, barely with commas. and i think that that is something you can use to convey a feeling of fear and desperation. but idk, you have to experiment with that and see what works for you.
(btw, i realize i might be using the word "suggestive" wrong here? "suggestive" in my native tongue means that something is eerie and haunting, sort of dark, giving off a feeling of apprehension. idk just thought i'd clarify lol. (& wtf wiktionary says haunting isn't an adjective? um well hopefull you get what i mean anyway /o\))
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well there you go. i am not surprised lol, it tends to be the same way for me.
no, i liked the staccato beat! and i don't think that pulling the sentences together removes this, i think commas can serve the same way as dots in this case. maybe it's just me, but i tend to read run-on sentences faster than shorter sentences. like when i write down my own dreams, like a nightmare with lots of things going on at once, where all the impressions swirl around in my head, i tend to write it as a rly long ranty sentences, barely with commas. and i think that that is something you can use to convey a feeling of fear and desperation. but idk, you have to experiment with that and see what works for you.
(btw, i realize i might be using the word "suggestive" wrong here? "suggestive" in my native tongue means that something is eerie and haunting, sort of dark, giving off a feeling of apprehension. idk just thought i'd clarify lol. (& wtf wiktionary says haunting isn't an adjective? um well hopefull you get what i mean anyway /o\))